Wednesday, May 1, 2013

The Writer's Voice Competition: Query and First 250



Dear "Writer's Voice" Friends,


Natalie’s senior class trip to England begins with a bang when she pees on a 747 in front of her entire class. What’s worse is that no one noticed, proving how invisible she is to the classmates that have called her Hannibal since freshman year, all thanks to a wired-shut jaw.


Four years of being teased and ignored has pushed Natalie into the shadows. But it's a cryptic message the morning of the flight that reminds her that her life is pure crap and it’s up to her to change.          


With high school seemingly transported to England, Natalie clings to her best friend, Krista, for support. But when Krista is lured to the dark side by a hard muscled football stud, Natalie all but packs up her bags to leave.


Enter Brant, a kaleidoscope-eyed Beatles fanatic who has far too much charm and even more demons in his own closet. And even though he’s 100% unavailable, he's possibly the one person who will take the high school politics out of her life, and give her the confidence to stand up against the people who shriveled her into a wallflower.


My young adult, contemporary novel, HERE COMES THE SUN, is complete at 66,000 words. It was recently chosen as a finalist for the Bakers Dozen competition at Miss Snark’s First Victim blog.


I have had one short story published in a multilingual publication during my tenure at Benedictine University, where I majored in Writing and Publishing with minors in Film Studies and Communication Arts.


Thank you for your time and consideration. I hope I'll have the opportunity to share the completed manuscript with you soon.

First 250:


I’m sitting outside my gate at O’Hare Airport mentally preparing for my senior class trip to England. The optimistic side of me expects to meet Prince Harry, have tea with the Queen, shop at Harrods and make a Beefeater giggle.
The pessimistic side of me remembers who my companions are for the trip; my classmates. To say that our relationship is unstable is stretching the truth. Our relationship is one big ball of toxic.
            Last night while I packed, my mom sat down on my bed and tapped the spot next to her, beckoning for some company. I threw my yoga pants into my suitcase and joined her, ignoring the scowl she threw towards my wardrobe.
My mom is an older version of myself in pretty much every way. We both generally tie our unruly hair back in a ponytail. Our blue eyes have never needed glasses. And we’re pale until the summer sun brings us a tan. How are we different? My mom can talk non-stop to anyone who will listen, while I prefer to just listen.
And tonight she wanted to talk.
She immediately laid in on me about my clothing choices. Yoga pants? Really? I wasn’t a bum. And did I remember to place my shampoo in a plastic bag, just in case the pressure makes it explode? And don’t I want to bring an extra set of clothing with me in my carry-on to freshen up when I arrive at Manchester Airport? It took all my strength not to roll my eyes. But yoga pants are comfy. Yes, my shampoo is locked away in a plastic bag. And I don’t have any more room in my carry-on for clothes.




Sunday, February 3, 2013

Cupid's Kissing Scene Competition-Here Comes the Sun



This scene is brought to you by Cupid's Kissing Scene Competition, which can be located here. The italics are my lead-in.  Enjoy.:)

Here Comes the Sun
During a game of "5 Things" ( a bit like truth or dare in which each person needs to admit 5 things about himself, #5 being light and #1 being the doozy), Brant decides to use his #2 to tell Natalie that it was he who's had a crush on her since they arrived on British soil.  He uses # 1 to......         

            “You?”

            “Me.” He shrugs. “Yea, sorry if I got your hopes up.” He grins and I nearly fall against him in happiness. “I didn't know everyone then, besides, well, my group. You just, I don't know, awakened something in me with a single look. Do you know that I went looking for you at Conwy Castle that day, thinking of anything to say to you that would make you talk to me?”

            I think I just died and went to heaven. Or at least was just lifted up from Hades. Horrible place.

            “Is that your number one?”

            He looks taken aback, but quickly composes himself with a quick shake of his head. “No. My number one, and you'll have to forgive me right now, is that I brought you on this ferris wheel today so that,” he stops, his eyes traveling my lips and I almost know what's coming. 
           Almost.

            I hear my voice, but I don't even realize I'm speaking. My heart is thwacking hard against my chest, seemingly trying to crack my ribs. The words come out so softly that even I find them inaudible. “So that what?”

            He pauses, just for a moment. “So that I can do this.” And before my body and mind can react, he leans down and spreads feathery light kisses across my lips. With his hands encircling me, he pulls me in closer, our frantic hearts beating together. And the more he kisses me, the more I want. I follow his lead and with my hands, I encircle his head, my hands weaving through his hair. Our kiss deepens. He tastes like mint, his lips are warm and moist, and I give and take as much as I can.

            When I finally run out of air we pull apart, our eyes wide in a fresh excitement and our mouths open, gasping for more. But with no explanation needed, no words to be spoken, I drop my head onto his chest and watch as night falls on the city of London.



Friday, January 11, 2013

Answering Dora

My 5 year old while watching Dora....

Dora: Where do I go next?
Son: I'm not telling you.


At the end of Dora...

Dora: What was your favorite part of the story.  

Son: Nothing.


Why does he watch Dora?????